Ice Godslayer Magic 2

Name: Glacial Abyss
Rank: C
Magic Cost: 20
Requirements: Must be an Ice God Slayer, Frozen Tempest must be active
Class: Offense
Range: 30ft
Element: Ice
Effect: Using the magic already gathered from activating her Frozen Tempest spell, Nix gathers more magic and focuses it into the vortex. She then expands the vortex outward and expels the magic towards her opponent, causing barbs of ice to form up from the ground in a wave towards them. The barbs are 10ft tall and 5ft wide and should the opponent be pierced by one of the barbs, they will receive damage and ice will spread from the point of impact. This will cause reduced mobility and range of motion for 1 post.
Magic Circle:

Spoiler:

CD: 3 posts
Dur: 1 post (like the Ice Spires spell, the barbs take 1 post to reach their target)
Training: Will be purchased at a later time
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Name: Ice Spires (Upgraded)
Rank: D-C
Magic Cost: 10 | 20
Requirements: Must be an Ice God Slayer, must know the original spell
Class: Offense
Range: 30ft
Element: Ice
Effect: The strength of the spell depends on the amount of magic paid for it:
D-Rank:
An icy mist begins to flow from Nix' hands then she presses them together as she gathers her magic. She then presses them to the ground, channeling the magic into the ground and towards her opponent. The magic seal appears beneath them then pillars of ice two feet wide and a foot thick (their height is dependent on her opponent, they match his/her height and increase by one foot) form up in a complete circle around them. Nix then channels more magic into the circle, causing the pillars to close into her opponent, causing damage on impact. The pillars remain stationary until my next post, after which they begin to close in on my opponent. The spires break upon impact.

CD: 3 posts
Dur: 1 post
C-rank:
An icy mist begins to flow from Nix' hands then she presses them together as she gathers her magic. She then presses them to the ground, channeling the magic into the ground and towards her opponent. The magic seal appears beneath them then pillars of ice 4 feet wide and 2 feet thick (their height is dependent on her opponent, they match his/her height and increase by one foot) form up in a complete circle around them. Nix then channels more magic into the circle, causing the pillars to close into her opponent, causing damage on impact. Nix has slightly more control over the spell, able to now relocate the position of the pillars once before they begin to close in on her opponent. It takes one post to move the pillars if she chooses to, then another post for the pillars to close in on her opponent. The spires break upon impact.
Magic Circle:

Spoiler:

CD: 4 posts
Dur: 2 posts
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Name: Whiteout (Frozen Tempest Upgraded)
Rank: D-C
Magic Cost: 10 to activate and 5 to sustain | 20 to activate and 10 to sustain
Requirements: Must be an Ice God Slayer, Frozen Tempest must be active
Class: Defense
Range: 25ft centered around Nix' current location
Element: Ice
Effect:
D-rank:
Nix starts by gathering her magic then expelling it out into the air around her. The released magic freezes the moisture in the air to form a swirling vortex of ice crystals around her, shielding her from damage as well as inflicting damage on anyone who attempts to pass through the crystals. The number of spells that can be blocked is dependent on the opposing mage's rank. (X- None, S- None, A- None, B- None, C- Can only weaken one spell, D- 3 spells). Despite its defensive capabilities, it is still able to be dispelled by fire magic.

C-rank:
Using the magic already gathered from activating her Frozen Tempest spell, Nix gathers more magic and focuses it into the vortex. She then expands the vortex outward and further condenses the magic within. The the overcharge of magic causes the vortex to become a miniature storm of ice that surrounds Nix, shielding her from spells. Spells with piercing abilities, such as spikes or spear attributes, are able to pass through the storm, but their force is reduced by the constantly moving ice. This gives Nix the option, should she decide to, to dodge the attack. Should her opponent attempt to physically attack the barrier or get too close, the ice from the storm will begin to cling to them and spread. This causes reduced mobility and range of motion for 1 post. The number of spells negated is based on the opposing mage's rank. (X- None, S- None, A- None, B- Weakens 1 spell, C- 2 spells, D- 4 spells). Like her Frozen Tempest spell, Fire magic is capable of weakening if not altogether dispelling it (dependent on the rank of the opposing spell)
Magic Circle:

Spoiler:

CD: 5 posts
Dur: 6 posts
Training: Will be purchased at a later time

Glacial Abyss: Approved

Ice Spires: Approved

Whiteout: Change C-rank 3 to 2 and D-rank 4 to 3.

Edited

Approved 1/2

All your spells are wierd, first of all go over gramatic and shizzle again, look that your sentence actually soung right and make sense.

Then.. for you Glacier.. you didn't say how many Glaciers your making.. besides you use your frozen tempest... to make them from the ground? why not just make em and fire them at your enemy...

for whiteout... i didn't liked this spell at first since it was some kinda ice tornado surrounding you which already is pretty high ranked and you stated it unbreakable until a certain amount of hits are landed.... and now it turns into a snow storm protecting you?
1) former form was stronger
2) a snow/ ice storm doesn't protect of anything really.... ice wall thing surrounding you or actuall bigger ice shards would be reasonable and actually cause defense alltough their offeniseve strenght would drop... but not like this please
3) Something swhich went by unnoticed before BUT CANNOT BE ALLOWED your ultra defensive aura which is active every singl post is a protection buff and therefore need magic cost per post

for ice spires: you just stated it became a feet taller and thicker, but you they can do WHAT after charging at enemy? Change directions or whut? and you didn't yet said they were surrounding enemy even through i wanted you to do so... well you wrote it in Duration.. but hey put that into descriptions please


and for all your ranges... THEIR 40 FEET DUDE thats friking long for a non-far ranged magic

Edited.

For Glacial Abyss, it's not a projectile, I forcibly dispel Frozen Tempest by overloading it with magic and forcing it at my opponent. It creates spikes of ice that move towards them over the range of the spell. It looks kind of like this (just with the measurements I stated in the description:(

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With Whiteout, it's not exactly an ice storm, I just said that because it sounds cooler. It's more of a bubble around me. (Let's be honest, saying you're protected by an ice storm sounds alot cooler than saying you're protected by a bubble XD) Think Neji's Eight Trigrams Heavenly Spin jutsu.

For Ice Spires, I bolded the part about surrounding my opponent with the pillars....it was added the first time you asked. I also moved the part regarding the pillars' movement up into the description.

I also reduced the ranges to 30 (for Glacial Abyss) and 25 (for Whiteout) and added a sustained magic cost to Whiteout.

say storm of ice instead of ice storm and maybe take in to consideration that special spells which are for example d-rank could still break your spell like...
a tree trunk with pointy tip thrown at you or just anything causing rather strong piercing magic, cause just saying it can defend again anything except fire is like... me saying i make a stone wall but you can only tear it down by buying a tank and shooting it down... get what i mean? Every spell has it's weak points and it shouldn't be as small as yours...

for glacier maybe add it causes piercing damage or such since it seems like those ice things growing from the ground are pretty spicked and send someone flying.... and make em a tad smaller... 5 m big for a c-rank spell is kinda giant... and would tear apart anyone at once..

and i am interested in what happens with thaose ice walls after they crashed into someone... state all this and i may approve

Edited

2/2 approved

Glacial Abyss: 20,000 J!

Ice Spires: 4,000 J

Whiteout: 4,000 J

I'm buying Whiteout now for 4000J

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Whiteout has been bought!

Buying Ice Spires for 4000J

Ice Spires has been bought!

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Buying Glacial Abyss

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