Forge Magic (complete)

Primary Magic: Forge Magic
Secondary Magic: N/a
Caster or Holder: Caster
Description:
Forge Magic is magic that allows the creation of objects using the user’s magic. There are two types: temporary and "permanent" creations. Temporary creations can only last for a few minutes and take time to construct, but in exchange require nearly no magic at all; these are not suited for combat and will never be used then (so just day-to-day use). Permanent creations stay in the world until they are destroyed or they run out of energy; these are the constructs used in battle. Exceptions are normal pieces simple constructs (such as ordinary blades, toys, jewelry, pots etc.) they require a very minimal amount of magic as well.
Why “Forge” Magic? Because most permanent creations are machines (guns, artillery units, planes etc.), things created in a weapons forge. The mana consumption of a construct depends on the size and complexity as well as the recourses used. All creations operate under the user’s command, but autonomously/by themselves (though some constructs require manual use e.g. close-range weapons, armors, certain guns etc.). It also allows the reinforcement of the constructs, though other spells are needed. The constructs are made to remain in existance for long periods of time, but have a rather long cooldown.

Strengths:
This magic was designed for all out war and combat on any frontier. This makes it quite formidable since all constructs are made to deal massive damage and to be able to take on great damage as well. William’s grand knowledge of mechanics is the best support for this magic. The fact that the constructs stay in existence until destruction and operate separately gives this magic a tactical advantage. The creations can be summoned within an area of 20 km.
Long Duration.

Weaknesses:
Most constructs made to do great damage are usually pretty immobile, making them easy targets. All constructs cannot do anything beyond what they are mechanically able to do, unless they improved through another spell. Since most constructs are “independent” from the user, once the constructs are destroyed the user is left defenseless (an exception being manual operated objects).
Long Cooldown.


Name: Smoke Grenade
Rank: E
Magic Cost: 5
Requirements: The Mask that William always has on.
Class: Supplementary
Range: 5-6 m
Element: N/a
Effect: The user creates 4 smoke grenades which are thrown consecutively. These grenades release a large amount of smoke that blocks the enemies’ vision. William’s mask allows him to see through the smoke. Strong gusts of wind will disperse the smoke more quickly. The grenade can be thrown 5-6 meters while the smoke covers a large area (100 m^2).
Magic Circle: There is no magic circle. The object appears as a digital 3D gird at first and is then materialized.
CD: 1
Dur: 3

Name: Power Processor
Rank: E
Magic Cost: 5
Requirements: William’s mask
Class: Supplementary
Range: 0 ft
Element: N/a
Effect: The lenses covering the eye sockets of the eyes of the mask become powerful processors. It increases accuracy by 20 % and also coordination and reaction time, increasing the chance to evade attacks.
Magic Circle: Dim blue shimmering from the eyes
CD: 4
Dur: 2


Name: Chainsaw
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Held Magic Cost:5
Requirements: Forge Magic
Class: Offense
Range: 0-6 ft
Element: N/a
Effect: The user creates a Chainsaw with a titanium-diamond blade (5 foot long chainsaw). It can tear through light armor. It causes light cuts and scraps. The blade can be broken if matched against a defense or offense higher than itself
Magic Circle: Virtual 3D grid shape that then materializes
CD: 2
Dur: 4


Name: Mechanized Limbs
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Held Magic Cost:5
Requirements: Forge Magic
Class: Offense/Supplementary
Range: Arm length
Element: N/a
Effect: [/b ]The user creates a mechanical outer layer over both arms and legs. This attachment gives the user superior strength in arms and legs, resulting in greater running speed and hitting strength (25% increase inboth limbs).
[b]Magic Circle: Virtual 3D grid structure then materialization.
CD: 3
Dur: 4

Name: Turret - Pellet
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Held Magic Cost:5
Requirements: Forge Magic
Class: Supplementary/Offense
Range: 25 ft
Element: N/a
Effect: The user creates 2 turrets that shoots pellets in short bursts. These can be set up anywhere within the 20 foot area where things may be created. These do little damage (a few bruises at most), but can still hurt quite a bit. It may provide a tactical advantage.Cndition is that the two turrets must be parallel to each other.They can turn 360 degrees.
Downide is that these turrets are stationairy units and can be easily broken... but not approached. These things provide support for the user.
Magic Circle: The object appears as a digital 3D gird shape at first and is then materialized.
CD: 3
Dur: 4

Greetings.
It appears I will once again be the first to review your application. Now, if you don't mind I'll cut the small talk and dive right in.

The spell "Smoke Grenade". <-- That range is FAR too much. You see, a spells rank no only determines it's strength and effectiveness, but also the range. For spells that are E rank this is law as well. Make the smoke go 10-15 Feet or 5-6 Meters. I can allow that much. I would peg the duration but it's workable.



Power Processor:
Now! I know accuracy isn't a staple stat that we see used often here. However, I understand it's value. This spells is a bit too much. Near 100% accuracy and calculated movement? Sounds like the sharigan in an alternate outfit. Let's say if gives you a 30% visual enhancement. Drop the calculations. Naturally with more detailed vision you're coordination should rise slightly too. Not enough to ensure an escape, but more than average. [Try that spell for a D rank at least. Same specifics. and we'll discuss]

Chainsaw:
Two issues. The duration is too much, change it from 8 to about 3-4, seeing as it's an offensive thing. D ranks were never intended to tear skin or anything you see. So by this being able to tear moderate armor I'll have to halt it. Now! Being realistic and based on the current D ranks I see approved. (No idea why it's that way) tearing skin DOES seem possible and in some cases more that possible. However! This is contained to a degree. [NOTE: Things will be changing] So, I'll allow light armor. Meaning jeans and fabric of that quality can be torn. Skin argumented. Light cuts and scraps. Fair?

Mechanized Limbs:
This is fine, aside from duration. Make it 4 as it does multiple things. I'd just like to inform you that buffs of D rank stage permit a 50% increase max. Thus, you can divide that increase 25% - 25% to either area of mix it up a bit. I can give you a rough estimate of the increased physical abilities from the percentage. Take in mind it won't be much though, especially when split.

Turret Pellet:
Major issues. As I'm sure you can tell. Range is far too much. Take it down to about 15-25 Feet maximum. Also please add more information on these turrets. Can the turn to fire?

Another issue 3 rounds per second? Unacceptable no matter how weak they are. One burst per post. Meaning it can fire one round per post.

Another issue. 4 machines? No. I can't have that. Make it 2. And I'll also need them to be parallel with a distance of 10 feet maximum.

Last. That duration is not going to fly. Dual stationary units that fire with range and it last 6 turns? Not on my watch.

Edit and bump when complete please.

Done editing, but damn... these rules are harsher than any site i've RP'd on. I honestly tried to base the range of the attacks realistlicly (e.g. the max throwing distance of a human). And the duration... I have always been able to comensate that with CD.

I'm not arguing.I accept these rules, but seriously: a bit harsh don't ou think?

Few issues remain. It's 50% max. 50% to both would be 100%.

Those turrets need to be create within a 10 Foot area space.

Edit and I'll approve.

Yeah, I know they are kind of tight, but this isn't without reason. Consider the fact magic comes from nowhere. It's bond to be heavily limited at beginning stages. As you develop you'll grow more adept. Trust me. It's fine. Besides 20KM was pretty vast man. Yikes.

Main reason why things seem limited is because this is beginning stage. You know, charmander has to live with ember before it can finaly get to that flame thrower. Still, if you got suggestions I'm willing to listen.

maybe loosen up on the range. I mean if you summon ok, a limit is necessary. But when it comes to guns and projectiles and such, there really is no point in limiting those to 20 feet... the average human can throw a rock far further than that. It jut simply doesn't make sense to me.

Approval 1/2

I didn't make the system, I just follow it honestly. Doesn't bother me though, I mean You can't always think realistic I've grown to notice such. Take it with a grain of salt. Higher rank moves have their range increased quite a bit.

Still, your comment has been recorded. Hopefully we can offer a tad more range, without giving away means. Honestly it would be a hassle changing something that works well. So it's a tough call.

I'll do the next part of your app I'll post when done reviewing ^_^

Ok.

Smoke Grenade question on that. Is the range the range for the entire spell or for just 1 grenade?

Power Processor Approved

Chainsaw Can that blade be broken if so by what? Does it have any advantage to certain elements if so what and the same for disadvantages. If no element applies thats cool too just show what it takes to break it.

Limbs Approved

Turrets Put what it takes to destroy them and the elemental advantage and disadvantages.

What I stated is the range it can be thrown.

The turrets have no elemnt like all the other spels.

Ok then:

Grenade: How much of the area will be filled with smoke? And lower the duration a turn since it is an E rank spell

Power Processor Approved

For the last 3 put a held magic amount half the amount of the original use

edited

Yea lower the range of the smoke on the grenades down 100 meters for an E rank seems alittle too much

100 m^2 = 10m * 10m Any lower than this and it really won't make any sense...

Approved 2/2